Thursday 4 August 2016

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We put on jackets my mum says ‘you sure you want to do this it is the middle of winter’ we all ‘say yes’. We  go to the paddock the dew on the grass in getting my legs it's very cold with no cows in, with my cousins and my brother. My oldest cousin says he will be in first he starts to count I start running trying to dodge the poo I run to the closest big log and I find a foot hole and jump onto the top of the log the top of the log weirdly shaped so it is pretty comfy all I can feel is the bitter wind the dew in the air and how cold the log is. The torch goes on I try to hide behind a root  in the log it works he comes over to me. Liam  looks behind the log I try to keep as still as possible liam luckily doesn’t look up, so I jump down and shout i’ve  out i've WON  then our parents say come toast some marshmallows, we all say yes.

4 comments:

  1. That was lots of fun that night, you described it very well.

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  2. Kia ora Sonny
    That story was awesome I wish that I could toast marshmallows.
    I like how you described the dew grass and the cold air.
    Have a great day
    from Harry

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  3. Hi sonny,
    nice work at writing that cool story I beat those marshmallows was yum!
    Next time to make it beater mabey you want to not push enter 2 times in your writing. :) :)

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  4. Hi my name is Tylah. You done a great job on the story. It was so awesome but maybe you could add more detail about what is the story about.maybe you can check my blog my blog is http://wpstylahc.blogspot.co.nz/

    from Tylah

    blog ya later

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