Friday 29 July 2016

my Monday morning


Monday morning
I wake up to the sound of the fire being made. It  feels like six o'clock but when I get up it is seven o'clock . So I grab my blanket chuck it on the couch and turn the tv on to watch some cartoons then my mum  gets up and comes out here and wants to watch the news ‘I say come on ten more minutes’ mum says ‘no’ so 5 minutes later my brother gets up by this time I'm already dressed so I grab an apple and eat it slowly because I'm normally not hungry in the morning I  walk out to the kitchen and all I see out the kitchen window is white mist from the barber, 20 minutes later my mum says  ‘get your clothes on’ so I throw my blanket on the floor and jump off the couch and stumble to my room still half asleep so I put my clothes on it feels like I'm in a snowstorm it's so cold but I do  next thing I grab my toothbrush and brush my teeth and get in the car
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4 comments:

  1. Unknown29 July 2016 at 11:34

    I like the recrafting that you did on this piece, Sonny. Next time you publish it is super important to include punctuation - I'm mostly looking at basic sentence punctuation here. You've included some great details here.

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  2. Jack1 August 2016 at 14:26

    hi sonny cool story, next time you could not have such a big space in between the title and the story.

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  3. Anonymous11 August 2016 at 14:18

    Hi my name is Conroy and what I really liked about your blog was your writing on Monday morning and spotlight. They were really detailed. Your screencastify video was really cool and you spoke loud and clearly. Maybe next time you could work on is checking that your writing makes sense. If you want to visit my blog just go to http://wpsconroyc.blogspot.co.nz/.

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  4. Anonymous20 September 2016 at 11:33

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